This is my third review of a full read for the Peripheral Prospectors judging team for SPSFC#4. For more information about the team and our progress, please go to the team update page here.

The book is Transference by Ian Patterson (author site here). The book is available from Amazon and BookShop.org.

Blurb

Nicholas Fiveboroughs is a Sicko, someone that takes on others’ illnesses. In a city where diseases can be transferred, the rich buy longer lives without pain, and the poor get a short life of constant sickness. Maybe it was fate, or maybe someone is looking out for him, but after Nicholas barely survives his latest affliction, he gets the chance to try and change things. To finally stop the whole disease transfer network.

Tensions escalate as Nicholas infiltrates a higher society he doesn’t understand, and starts to fall for the very person he needs to manipulate to be successful. And between run-ins with a talking animal and genetically modified humans, the world around him just keeps getting stranger. Can Nicholas tear down the disease transfer architecture? And can he do it without losing his own humanity along the way?

My Review

This is an exciting, imaginative story about a dystopian society and a man who wants to overturn it. There are some great sci-fi concepts here, including big moral dilemmas, ambiguous choices, and surprisingly, some anime-style fights.

Plot and Characters

I don’t generally want to spoil stuff when I review. The blurb above does a great job setting up the central plot. A man who should be dead assumes the identity of someone of far higher social status, with the goal of undoing the malevolent technology at the heart of this dysfunctional, immoral society.

We stay with Nicholas Fiveboroughs here through the whole book – a single perspective, first person. (Everybody here has a normal first name and then a surname that’s the district in the city where they live.) He should be stuck in the impoverished bottom tier, but through some personal initiative, good friends, and luck, he moves up. He’s on a mission, which is clear from the opening, and most of the book is him trying to accomplish that mission, although he ends up lost at times in the wealthy world he infiltrates and in the identity of the man he’s replaced.

My Thoughts

The initial premise for this story is a great one, worthy of the titans of classic sci fi, or of one of those really cool Star Trek episodes where the crew visits a new planet and realizes their whole society is based on an immoral premise (where then the bridge crew get to judge them and make big speeches). It also invokes memories of some of the recent big dystopian hits, like Hunger Games, Divergent, or Maze Runner, where there’s a horrific society that imposes pain and suffering on some groups for the benefit of others. Like those societies, this one doesn’t always make sense or seem workable, but it’s still a fun concept to explore and provides ample fertile soil for drama and class struggle.

Here, we have a world where the wealthy can avoid sickness and death by paying the poor to take on their diseases – the kind of thing that would be perfectly at home in an Ursula K. LeGuin story (e.g. Omelas) or Philip K. Dick. The more severe the illness, the higher the cost, but if you have the money, you can even pay someone to take on your stage-four cancer and die for you. The poor are willing to do this, because they live a life of extreme deprivation, forced to eat bland food that comes in cubes, held in utter poverty their whole lives. Sometimes, people will volunteer to die of disease to earn money to raise their families out of poverty, something that Nicholas’ dad did for him and his mother, though not very far out of poverty, since they still live in the cube-eating ghetto.

This concept is well described at the book’s opening, and I thought we were in for a thinky, morally thorny book about such a society. We mostly don’t get that, although there are times where it comes back to the fore, especially in a heartbreaking scene involving a servant and his child. Almost immediately, and with little groundwork, we’re launched into a vendetta story, where Nicholas tells us he is enraged by the world he lives in and wants to tear it down. I say “tells us,” because this is all described by Nicholas in the first person present tense in the early chapters. There are references to events he’s seen and poverty and privation he’s witnessed, but they’re all in retrospect, not directly visible to us. I think it would have been better to actually experience more of the deprivation and anguish that motivated Nicholas, which we do in places. Instead, you kind of have to buy into his framing of the society and accept his single-minded rage.

After this short intro, the book does what it will do a couple times – become a different book about a different thing entirely. We leave behind the sickness transfer and focus on another great concept for classic sci fi or a Star Trek episode: this society has the ability, through genetic modification and a kind of biologic reskinning plus memory recordings, to allow one person to take on the appearance, memories, and personality of other people. Nicholas does this to access the life and household of a wealthy socialite, to further his mission to destroy the sickness-transfer process. He’s a little short on details of how he’s going to do this, but it’s fun to see him try.

Again, we have a topic (identity transfer, and a man trapped in another man’s life – very The Return of Martin Guerre) that could have been a whole, cool book on its own, and we spend some time there, but eventually that fades, and we run through another couple book premises, which I won’t detail here to avoid spoilers.

With each change of pace and focus, especially as the book became more action-oriented, I cared less, and by the time we got to the last couple of these shifts, I was confused, not engaged, and sort of shellshocked, particularly by the last few chapters. I think if there were fewer twists and reveals, less action, and more swimming in the discordant life Nicholas was living and the ethical issues he and the society were wrestling with, I might have gravitated more to the story. Those were the parts I liked the most.

From a writing standpoint, this is mostly engaging and moves the plot forward at a breathless pace. To me, a lot of the dialogue, and even Nicholas’ internal monologue, felt like stuff real people wouldn’t say – very emotional, very on point, almost always with high emotion. Of course, this is a different society from ours, and maybe they all just talk like that, at what must be a very high decibel level, but I would have liked some more real-seeming conversations rather than the melodramatic line readings we often got here.

Nicholas also has a tendency to fly into impulsive and kinda stupid actions, which was frustrating, and rather than getting smarter as the book went on, he mostly lost agency, getting swept along by others. The emergence of a ton of weird tech in the second half of the book, much of it weapons-based, was unexpected and a little hard to follow, and a lot of it seemed to appear right when the plot needed it. There’s a stretch where I swear it seemed like I was reading descriptions of anime movie battles, which is not where I thought this was headed.

The present tense first person is immediate and active and engaging, although I personally find it a little harder to read than past tense, and it wavered at a couple points when there was backstory to reveal. The book is mostly edited well except that there are tons of comma splices in here. Probably at least a hundred (literally), maybe more. There were often two on a page, sometimes two in a paragraph. Not something that all readers would notice, but it clanked every time I hit one.

A minor worldbuilding quibble – if everybody has a normal first name and a last name that’s the district they live in, and if everybody has a common, normal English name (as they do here), I would think you’d run out of those names pretty fast, well before you ran out of people to name. Maybe we just didn’t see the folks named stuff like Brphs and Spkrdink, but I didn’t really see how this could work. Also, even in impoverished places, people find wonderful things to do with the limited food resources they have, so I thought the cube-eating masses would have come up with all sorts of casseroles, stews, kebabs, and other dishes. That’s hinted at in a couple spots, but I felt like a lot of the poor here were at times more Dickensian poor, wearing big “I’m a victim” signs, rather than people who loved and lived.

Where the book worked well was in exploring the ethics of a society with extreme economic stratification – how people live with themselves with either privilege or hardship, and what it does to people in those situations. There were also a bunch of moral dilemmas and hazards, where at times people were forced into heroic sacrifices that seemed real. Great stuff there. We only really got a good sense of how two of the social strata live, and really only one in detail (the one Nicholas joins in disguise). As I felt with Hunger Games, I’d have liked to have a better idea how it all came together rather than the broad primary color strokes I got to see that provoked more questions than answers.

Summation

There is no shortage of creativity here, and Patterson dives right into some really neat, thorny ethical issues, the kind of issues which are at the beating heart of some of the best sci fi ever written. Where I might have written a slower book, exploring those deep issues in more detail, Patterson went a different way, with action and excitement and lots of twists. That’s a totally valid path to choose – it’s his book after all! – and the action rips a frenetic pace, but where the story did wrestle with those harder moral things, I think it was at its strongest, at least for me. I’d have liked to see more of that and fewer robot fights with glowy weapons.